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Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


As I put my head down to rest
The last thought through my mind is him
Hoping that he’s thinking of me too
Just one last kiss before I close my eyes

Maybe if I hold my breath long enough
He will see how much I don’t want to hang on
Yet I’m scared to loose a piece of my heart
You know, that thing that’s hurt since he last kissed me

As time goes on I’ll find out what’s wrong with me
But for now I’ll just keep holding my breath
Not for him
But for something worth breathing for
©2007-2008 ~short-n-luvin-it
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just how i felt at the moment... needs work tho
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~Emocinderella:iconEmocinderella: Dec 3, 2007, 9:53:05 AM
Ooh I really like this! Very nice. ^_^

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As water reflects the face, so one's life reflects the heart." :heart:
~morbidly-joyful:iconmorbidly-joyful: Dec 3, 2007, 8:39:43 PM
omg.. as i was reading this i was like.. hmm.. allright.. but the end.. OMG! i love it. its amazing.

"As time goes on I’ll find out what’s wrong with me
But for now I’ll just keep holding my breath
Not for him
But for something worth breathing for"

im telling you.. its amazing. great line! (if that is allright with you i might have to steal this for my msn personal message..but ill put your name on it of course!)
your inspireing.. i wish i could write like that.
~short-n-luvin-it:iconshort-n-luvin-it: Dec 3, 2007, 11:40:54 PM
awe... thank you.

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~in the depth of my heart there is a spot that i have saved for you. do you want it or should it burn away with the rest of me?~
~short-n-luvin-it:iconshort-n-luvin-it: Dec 3, 2007, 11:44:22 PM
thank you so much. that means a lot. im glad that you found that much meaning in it. thats my fave line out of the whole thing. the rest of it needs work. that part im sticking with tho.

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~in the depth of my heart there is a spot that i have saved for you. do you want it or should it burn away with the rest of me?~
~Emocinderella:iconEmocinderella: Dec 4, 2007, 8:24:00 AM
you're welcome! ^_^

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As water reflects the face, so one's life reflects the heart." :heart:
~morbidly-joyful:iconmorbidly-joyful: Dec 4, 2007, 9:21:14 PM
i like the rest too.. i just like that one line the best. your a great writer. i write some.. actually im putting a new poem up tonight. i dont write very well but thats okay.. ill get better [[i hope!]]
~tweetyjoe:icontweetyjoe: Dec 6, 2007, 11:43:41 AM
I like it. :clap:

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What are we living for? Are we living just to die or are we making it worth living?
~short-n-luvin-it:iconshort-n-luvin-it: Dec 10, 2007, 3:33:57 PM
thanks.

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~in the depth of my heart there is a spot that i have saved for you. do you want it or should it burn away with the rest of me?~
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